little miss military brat

Well, this is certainly different. You put in some good detail. I'm definitely going to read the rest of it, to see what happens. I really like how you set ...

i think its a great start to what will be a wonderful story. a little more detail would have been nice, but that's just me. it didn't feel as dark ...

“Leila? Leila! Wait! Come back!” Leila grinned as she ran through her father’s apple orchard. Ladders, sacks and buckets were littered everywhere, as it was the height of the picking ...

“So what’re you here for?” Nicole turned her head. The woman who now sat on the other side of the table with her was a small Latina woman, with dark ...

yup, i'm hooked. the prologue was good, and this is even better. you were good with the detail. i liked the comedy too. very few stories can make me truly ...

Much respect to you. I could never write like that. It sounds like something right out of a classic. I loved it. I understood it, and your writing style seems ...

I liked it. I almost started to cry. (I'm super emotional like that.) I really liked Edward up until he left Bella, and he has yet to redeem himself in ...

I liked it. Although, I have to agree, the "darling" was out of character for Edward. He seems too "upperclass" (for lack of better word) for that. Although the "I ...

I like it. You included plenty of detail and I like how you described and explained your character's choice. I would love to read more of this story if you ...

I liked how you included the other characters' thoughts in there, instead of just focusing on edward and bella.